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Creative artists should always have the freedom to express their ideas (in paintings, books, films and songs) in anyway they wish. The government should not restrict what they do. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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 discussion around the world that artistic
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 should be restricted or not, even in some democratic countries. I agree with the idea of no
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 because I believe that society’s best
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 are served when there is no limitation in artistic fields.
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 of artistic expression is important in its own right.
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 gives the widest scope to the exchange of ideas in
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society and
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 promotes the general level of culture. There is a reason describing that
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 is essential as it is closely
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 to particular politics. If a government passes laws restricting artistic expressions on political speech without
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 of speech, the development of a democratic society would be greatly curtailed. Most
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the developed countries are not restricting the
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 of artists while some which restrict are dropped behind the world. Most advocates of limiting artistic
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 will say that they are not only for restrictions in certain cases.
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, in political content, or even perhaps religious content which is contrary to the majority religion of a country.
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, in the
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 case, suppression of political expression is very often a question of tightening legitimate criticism of corruption or abuse of power by the government.
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, outlawing minority religious views only creates greater tension and potential for conflict in society. In conclusion, creative
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 is an ideal worth defending. It makes possible the developments of culture, and it is
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 inherently linked to broader freedoms.

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