Nowadays, more and more children play computer games. Why do you think this is the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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keep us physically and mentally healthy, be it with our friends in a park or on a computer inside a room. It is observed that the newer generation prefers to play

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on their desktop

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of going out in open. In my essay, I will explain why it happens and

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tell why is it a negative development. In most nuclear families, both parents are working and

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it becomes difficult to spend time with their offspring.

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, little ones tend to spend more time with friends even after school and the best way to keep connected is via online gaming. Most commonly played online

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as Counter-Strike, Call of Duty, Halo 3 etc. are very addictive. Because of

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, kids like to play those

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more and more

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of physical

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like football or cricket.

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, it adversely affects the child’s health, both mentally and physically.

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playing online develops a competitive spirit in children, it

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makes them violent.

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happens because the nature of the game involves a lot of battles where children use different kinds of weapons,

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as guns, swords, tanks etc.

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, because of the addiction children are found to be involved in their laptops or mobiles all the time even in social gatherings, thereby making them completely non-social. In conclusion, kids playing a lot of computer

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is a result of poor parenting, which I believe creates a huge negative effect because it makes them completely non-social.

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negative development of the newer generation needs immediate attention.

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