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Salary is the main consideration when choosing a job.To what extent do you agree or disagree with that idea?

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Introduction
It is true that the amount of
salary
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 is a necessary factor in considering a
job
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.
However
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 undeniably, the size of the
salary
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 offered is not exactly the most important. While I disagree with
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 idea, I
also
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 think that
salary
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 may be an important motivating factor for youths who are lazy at work.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand,
decision
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the decision
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 on a career with the wages may
also
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 have positive sides. In today’s expensive world, money plays an essential role to survive since it can make
the
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apply
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lives more convenient.
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, according to the environment’s logic, a high
salary
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 represents a successful and graceful life.
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, those who have got an outstanding education and high level of technical skill want to earn high
payment
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payments
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 which is worth it with their qualifications.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, people
also
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 give equal importance to other aspects
such
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 as
job
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 security, career prospect,
job
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 satisfaction,
community
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and community
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 with colleagues and bosses, rather than
salary
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.
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, even though a doctor works in a
high profile
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 hospital
which
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that
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 only rich patients can afford, if he does not enjoy his
job
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, he will no longer experience different types of patients and his skill will be restricted. Good rapport with
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colleagues and bosses in the office is
also
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 necessary to achieve success in future,
otherwise
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, the work will be hampered.
Conclusion
To sum up,
salary
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 is not the only consideration while choosing a
job
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. Other aspects in combination play more vital roles and have more significance than money.
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, these factors should
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kept
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be kept
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 in
soul
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the soul
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 while picking a
job
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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