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Nowadays, overeating has become a serious problem for the wealthy nations, a problem which is even greater than hunger to others. Why is this happening? What can be the solution?

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In
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 contemporary era, all nations are suffering from many problems
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 as population, and pollution and
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people
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 become more hungry compared with the past,
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,
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 states suffer from find out a way to
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problem
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. In
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 essay, I would give reasons for
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problem
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 and write the solutions .
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, many well-developing sights have
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 kind of
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 because their citizens are wealthier and they afford all kinds of things easily.
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, the lifestyle of citizens is changed rapidly because of technology and data.
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, in the past
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 did not have much equipment so they worked in the agriculture department without many tools.
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, many children do not understand the value of food and mostly they waste food and parents make them happy so they make different dishes over the period. If I talk about the solution to
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problem
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 so very main is
people
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 should understand the
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 is the source of energy and all we are dependent only on foods so we don't waste food
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 in schools and academics teacher should explain the main value of
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 source.
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,
people
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 should start some physical activity so they divert their mind and
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 some kind of states suffers from
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problem
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 because they don't have storage systems. In conclusion,
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 is a global
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 and all nations come together to solve
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problem
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 because it will not only affect the
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 but
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 affect the biodiversity and environment of the world.
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