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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities other however say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required .dissucs both these views and give your opinion

#people #health #sports #facilities #effect #measures #dissucs
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The provided table chart depicts percentage information about literacy in five different countries and the entire world disaggregated by sex between 2000 and 2004. Overall, a glance at the graph reveals that Africa and Asia had the lowest education rates among the rest of the countries,
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 as America, Europe and Oceania. Another important point is that the literacy level of females was always lower as opposed to males and it never exceeded three quarters in Africa and Asia. Meanwhile, the difference between man and woman literacy was not
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 significant in the remaining countries. Oceania, Europe and America witnessed the broadest measure of more than 93 per
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 each.
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, Europe had the highest point of almost 99 per
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. With regards to an overall figure for the whole world, it accounted for 82%. Male and female made up 87.2 and 77.3 per
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 respectively. The education rates of African males and Asian females were roughly the same percentage of 71 per
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, whereas there is a considerable divergence between African females and Asian males. The
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 comprised a little more than half, the
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 much higher, 85 per
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