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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. ​ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The provided table chart depicts data about the admission of
students
 to Manchester University in three divergent years, disaggregated by sex and place, where the
students
 came from. Overall, a glance at the graph reveals that the
number
 of
students
, who came from abroad had increased. Meanwhile, the
number
 of
students
, who live near Manchester, had declined. With regards to sex, it kept roughly the same percentage in the beginning and at the end of the period. The total quantity of student enrolment was increased throughout the entire time frame. In 1937, a little more than half of the
students
 were from within 40 miles of Manchester,
however
, by 1967, that figure had dropped to 15 per cent, followed by a fall, accounting for around 2% in 2017. Overseas
students
number
 was roughly 7% per cent in 1937 and 1967.
Then
, at the end of the period, it constituted just below one-
third
. With regards to the broadest measure, In 1937, the
number
 of new scholars was 327. After 30 years, it was increased by more than three times and roughly six times in 2017, comprising 6247 pupils.
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  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
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  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
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  • compromise on quality
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