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People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. Why do you think this is? Whay measures can you suggest to make it easier

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Evolution gave us the main way of survival, that adaptability .
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, it is not the same harsh rule to alter or die as the ancient law of nature. Whereas, we still struggle with the eternal
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, it became harder to face altering our everyday routine because humans tend to feel more conservative. Our century is not considered an era of wars, or global migrations, that result in being addicted to an actual benevolent way of living.
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, it is very annoying for most citizens of
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 countries to get rid of their amenities and they consider it a catastrophe. Despite
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 fact, the main incentive for us to be open to
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 is understanding that most shifts
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modern
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 are progressive and they lead to better implementation of technologies.
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competitiveness is a phenomenon
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 really frightening, it implements an idea of a better result for a lower price.
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, we can expatiate over some unpredictable
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 even disastrous
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.
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 given by a state. The knowledge of social awareness is crucial for everyone.
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 is sure that they are safe from dire straights. In conclusion, I reckon that
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 should divide all
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 into dangerous and positive ones. We need to be aware of the
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 category and we should have an agile mindset to understand the inevitableness of the
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, the assurance of safety given by a state will make us feel that some
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 are vital.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adaptation
  • Anxiety
  • Resistance
  • Cultural barriers
  • Self-efficacy
  • Stress management
  • Gradual exposure
  • Open-mindedness
  • Support network
  • Skill-building
  • Mindfulness
  • Meditation
  • Routine
  • Confidence
  • Environmental barriers
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