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Every one of us should become a vegeterian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
There has been an argument by some people that we should all become vegetarians
instead
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 of consuming
meat
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, which they believe could pose health challenges. To some extent they are right, but in
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of the matter before my submission.
Body paragraph 1
As good as
vegetables
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 are, they cannot provide humans with all the nutrients they require for their complete well-being.
For instance
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, medical research has shown that the nutriment,
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 as fat and protein, needed by people, are resident in
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. It is
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 reasonable to know that these food ingredients which essential for the growth of both children and adults as
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 very important.
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, those individuals who are only feeding on
vegetables
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 could be stunted in growth and become sickly.
Body paragraph 2
However
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, there are those that say that people who take a lot of
meat
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 could be lacking in important minerals found in most
vegetables
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.
This
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 assertion could be valid from scientific studies that a great proportion of vitamins and minerals are deposited in fruits and
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.
Furthermore
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, it's been known that diseases like cancer, diabetes and heart disease occur
as a result
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 of excessive consumption of
meat
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 food while
this
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 is not peculiar to vegetarians.
In addition
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, it is already known that intake of red and processed
meat
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 heightens the risk of being diagnosed with bowel cancer.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the argument that everybody should be a vegetarian cannot hold water.
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, I am of the opinion that a balance should be struck based on the fact that humans need fats, proteins from
meat
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 and minerals from
vegetables
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 to have a balanced diet.

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