You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Write about the following topic:Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.Do you agree or disagree?
A lot of production
product
consist Fix the agreement mistake
products
high
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of high
level
of Fix the agreement mistake
levels
sugar
, which causes many health problems. The price
of sugary
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the sugary
a sugary
product
should be made Fix the agreement mistake
products
more high
to force Replace the words
higher
people
to consume less sweet
. In my opinion, I do disagree with that Fix the agreement mistake
sweets
statements
because Fix the agreement mistake
statement
people
are addicted by
sugary Change preposition
to
products
and Correct your spelling
increasing
inceasing
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decreasing
price
of Correct article usage
the price
sugar
which is a majority of the main dish will lead to a
huge market inflation.
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apply
Firstly
, people
are sticking with sugary product
, increasing Fix the agreement mistake
products
its
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their
price
won't change the high amount of sugar
consumption. In other words
, people
will keep buying the products
because sugary food
is already their main dish, also
the
sweet Correct article usage
apply
food
is part of original
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the original
food
in some culture
. Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
For example
, In Java, every food
taste
sweet Change the verb form
tastes
such
as Gudeg,
and Nasi Goreng Remove the comma
apply
which
core Correct pronoun usage
whose
indegerients
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independents
is
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are
sugar
. Thus
, the sugary food
is already attached with
their Change preposition
to
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lifestyle
life-style
. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
Instead
, people
should be aware about
intake. The government can make seminars or Change the preposition
of
campaign
to build Fix the agreement mistake
campaigns
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awareness
awereness
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awareness
to
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in
the
society.
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apply
Secondly
, the higher price
of sugar
products
would make less income of
individuals or companies Change preposition
for
that
can lead to huge market inflation. Correct pronoun usage
which
In addition
, sugary product
are high demand in the market where the Fix the agreement mistake
products
price
should be stable. In short, if the government decided to increase the price
, people
will suffer to afford it. For instance
, the
Indonesia's inflation Correct article usage
apply
increase
by 5.0% which is the biggest rate in ASIA because of Wrong verb form
increased
increased
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the increased
price
of food
and drink. Thus
, the solution of high sugary products
will have negative
impact on Add an article
a negative
economy
and lead Add an article
the economy
people
to poverty.
To conclude, although
, some Correct your spelling
suggest
sugest
sugary Correct your spelling
suggest
product
should be made more expensive to encourage Fix the agreement mistake
products
people
to consumer
less Replace the word
consume
sugar
, but
I disagree because Remove the conjunction
apply
people
get often to
consume their authentic Fix the infinitive
apply
sugar
food
and it would lead to worsen
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worsening
the
economy. I thinkCorrect article usage
apply
,
the government should make Remove the comma
apply
health
awareness campaign to introduce Correct article usage
a health
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a health
health
Replace the word
healthy
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lifestyle
life style
.Correct your spelling
lifestyle
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