You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Write about the following topic:Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.Do you agree or disagree?

A lot of production
product
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products
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consist
high
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level
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levels
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of
sugar
, which causes many health problems. The
price
of
sugary
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the sugary
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product
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products
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should be made
more high
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higher
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to force
people
to consume less
sweet
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sweets
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. In my opinion, I do disagree with that
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because
people
are addicted
by
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sugary
products
and
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increasing
inceasing
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decreasing
price
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the price
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of
sugar
which is a majority of the main dish will lead to
a
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huge market inflation.
Firstly
,
people
are sticking with sugary
product
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products
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, increasing
its
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their
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price
won't change the high amount of
sugar
consumption.
In other words
,
people
will keep buying the
products
because sugary
food
is already their main dish,
also
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sweet
food
is part of
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the original
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food
in some
culture
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cultures
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.
For example
, In Java, every
food
taste
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sweet
such
as Gudeg
,
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and Nasi Goreng
which
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whose
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core
indegerients
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independents
is
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are
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sugar
.
Thus
, the sugary
food
is already attached
with
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their
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lifestyle
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life-style
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lifestyle
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.
Instead
,
people
should be aware
about
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of
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intake. The government can make seminars or
campaign
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campaigns
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to build
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awareness
awereness
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awareness
to
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the
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society.
Secondly
, the higher
price
of
sugar
products
would make less income
of
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individuals or companies
that
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which
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can lead to huge market inflation.
In addition
, sugary
product
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products
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are high demand in the market where the
price
should be stable. In short, if the government decided to increase the
price
,
people
will suffer to afford it.
For instance
,
the
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Indonesia's inflation
increase
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by 5.0% which is the biggest rate in ASIA because of
increased
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the increased
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price
of
food
and drink.
Thus
, the solution of high sugary
products
will have
negative
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a negative
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impact on
economy
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the economy
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and lead
people
to poverty. To conclude,
although
, some
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suggest
sugest
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suggest
sugary
product
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products
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should be made more expensive to encourage
people
to
consumer
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consume
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less
sugar
,
but
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I disagree because
people
get often
to
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consume their authentic
sugar
food
and it would lead to
worsen
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the
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economy. I think
,
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the government should make
health
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a health
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awareness campaign to introduce
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a health
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health
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healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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.
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