Some people argue that because the internet makes it so easy for children to access facts, schools should not focus on teaching facts. Instead, they should focus on developing children’s skills and potential, and their relationships with other people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays,
the
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total access to any kind of information is able through
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the internet
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internet
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and anyone
could
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can
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get any kind of information that he or she needs.
Therefore
, there is an opinion that
schools
have not to teach students to know the
fact
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facts
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but to teach
skills
, communication and realize their potential. I mostly agree with that opinion but I think that learning of
facts
is an important part of
education
. As far as I am concerned, learning
of
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soft
skills
is one of the most important aspects of school
education
. Today, soft
skills
are often more necessary for
the
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working and producing goods and services than hard
skills
.
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work
and analysis,
for instance
, are undeniably two of the most required
skills
for
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project
work
. To build an effective and useful supportive
work
, people ought to know how to communicate with each other, and how to evaluate other's
work
,
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and be able to give
a
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reliable feedback.
Thus
,
schools
have to focus on teaching
skills
and communication to make students more reliable for
the
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real
work
.
On the other hand
, studying
of
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the
facts
develops not only fuel to apply
skills
but
also
soft
skills
as
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such as
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memorizing. Many
skills
are
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might not be applied without basic
knowledge
in the area of application,
similarly
, to learn
skills
usually
required
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requires
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good memorization.
For example
, to communicate effectively during the project
work
, important to memorize the
facts
from the done research to be able to operate with the
knowledge
automatically;
to
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apply analysis
skills
needed to understand the field of
the
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knowledge
as statistics or management.
Therefore
,
facts
are not the most important but still necessary part of school
education
. In conclusion, from my point of view, accessibility to the
internet
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allowed
schools
to change their focus
of
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children
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education
.
Therefore
,
schools
may change their main focus from hard
skills
as
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such as
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knowledge
to soft
skills
as
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such as
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communication and analysis but not
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about studying
facts
at all.
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