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Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university to work or to travel.Do the advantages of this outweigh this disadvantages.

#students #gap #year #school #university #work #travel #outweigh
It is believed that having a gap year before attend to
colleges
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 would be better than direct attending
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there without it. There are both merits and demerits and I think the benefits would greater than the drawbacks. On the one hand, having a gap year can bring many benefits.
First
 of all, students can gain lots of experiences which can be gotten by just studying. While doing it, they can get a job or go
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a trip
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trip
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. they will face many kinds of people.
Thus
, they can use social skills they learned
such
 as treating people to them.
Furthermore
, they can widen their sight, meeting and talking
people
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 who work or study in
different
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field
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.
Secondly
, pupils can earn money which will be used
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 their education expenses. They would combine to work and trip like
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working holiday
.
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this
, they would make money by themselves.
On the other hand
, it can cause some opposite effects. In the
first
 place, it would be
waste
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 if students would not spend time efficiently. Most of them would be adults relatively recently after a decade-long educational curriculum,
Therefore
, they want to enjoy that time, and it results in a waste of time and money. In
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, students would forget what they studied. If they do not study consistently, what they were educated
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 be faded as
times
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 flies. It can cause
that
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pupils cannot understand
contents
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 of universal education. In conclusion,
although
 a gab year
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have
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vary
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 demerits, its merits offset it.
Thus
, I think it should be encouraged.
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