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Is money an important factor in achieving hapiness?

Many
people
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 believe that
money
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 is an important factor in the pursuit of
happiness
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, while others do not. I myself understand that
money
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 is one of the important factors, but I
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 believe that it plays an important role in achieving
happiness
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. Those who do not believe that
happiness
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 is achieved by earning or spending
money
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,
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 may feel
happiness
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 by achieving their
life
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's purpose.
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, they may believe that
money
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 is an element of normal daily
life
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 and not an essential part of achieving
happiness
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.
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, many
people
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 believe that
money
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 allows them to pursue
happiness
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. With the rapid development of the global economy, owning assets is becoming increasingly important. Having many assets allows
people
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 to have more opportunities to experience the things they want to do.
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,
money
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 is an important factor in enriching
life
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 experiences, and it is certainly involved in
happiness
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. In conclusion, I believe that
money
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 is necessary to achieve
happiness
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 in
life
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.
This
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 is because
money
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's function of giving
people
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 the opportunity to have enriching experiences leads to the realization of
happiness
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.

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