Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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today, we have lots of alternatives to choose
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because
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of that few
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people
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think that we have more than
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enough
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enough
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. in my personal opinion,
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completely agree with
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statement
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statement
.  
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, today
business
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world
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is very competitive
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since
, there are so many similar companies. in that case, you can choose between thousands of alternatives.
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, there are unlimited chocolate brands like
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milka
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milk
, dairy milk,
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condos
, etc... because
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the alternatives are high, you do not have to
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to
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one option. so,
business
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world
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competition helps you to choose between many
options
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. in the past, there were no
such
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options
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available. so, people chose whatever they can easily
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on
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places.  
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, we live in a globalized
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. if we cannot find something in our motherland or we do not have better
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there, we can
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easily
easliy
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easily
find anything online or we can fly anywhere we want.
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, we can work abroad or we can study in
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country very easily.
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nowadays we can buy and order anything from anywhere in the
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. Even foods and
animals
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deliveries are available.
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,
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sometimes
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there can be a few
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too, like
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educational
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opportunities
oppotunities
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opportunities
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, medicine,
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and valuable
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metals. in
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conclusion
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conclusion
, most of the
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, we have
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amount of
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because of globalization and
business
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competition. but
some times
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sometimes
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it can be a few
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because of
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a lack
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of resources. we have to choose wisely, even
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though we
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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