Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices

today, we have lots of alternatives to choose

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persons

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think that we have more than

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enough

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enough

choices

. in my personal opinion,

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completely agree with

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, today

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since

, there are so many similar companies. in that case, you can choose between thousands of alternatives.

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, there are unlimited chocolate brands like

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milka

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milk

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condos

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the alternatives are high, you do not have to

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one option. so,

business

world

competition helps you to choose between many

options

. in the past, there were no

such

options

available. so, people chose whatever they can easily

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there, we can

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find anything online or we can fly anywhere we want.

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country very easily.

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nowadays we can buy and order anything from anywhere in the

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deliveries are available.

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some times

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educational

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opportunities

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opportunities

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amount of

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some times

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
36Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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overwhelmed
decision fatigue
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