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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
today, we have lots of alternatives to choose
,
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because
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persons
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 think that we have more than
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enough
enaugh
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enough
choices
. in my personal opinion,
i
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 completely agree with
this
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statement
statment
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statement
.  
firstly
, today
business
world
 is very competitive
simce
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since
, there are so many similar companies. in that case, you can choose between thousands of alternatives.
For example
, there are unlimited chocolate brands like
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milka
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milk
, dairy milk,
kandos
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condos
, etc... because
of
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the alternatives are high, you do not have to
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 to
a
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one option. so,
business
world
 competition helps you to choose between many
options
. in the past, there were no
such
options
 available. so, people chose whatever they can easily
found
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the
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business
 places.  
secondly
, we live in a globalized
world
. if we cannot find something in our motherland or we do not have better
choices
in
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there, we can
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easily
easliy
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easily
 find anything online or we can fly anywhere we want.
for instance
, we can work abroad or we can study in
foreign
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 country very easily.
Also
 nowadays we can buy and order anything from anywhere in the
world
. Even foods and
animals
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 deliveries are available.
finally
,
some times
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sometimes
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 there can be a few
choices
 too, like
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educational
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opportunities
oppotunities
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opportunities
, job
options
, medicine,
valuable
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and valuable
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 metals. in
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conclusion
conclution
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conclusion
, most of the
times
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time
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, we have
large
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 amount of
choices
 because of globalization and
business
 competition. but
some times
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sometimes
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 it can be a few
choices
 because of
lack
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a lack
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 of resources. we have to choose wisely, even
we
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though we
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 have so many
options
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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