Some people say that advertising is extremely useful at persuade us to buy things. Others people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

The effectiveness of advertising in
business
is debatable which influenced
people
a lot. Some individuals
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hold
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the opinion that
advertisement
can influence convince
people
successfully to purchase reliable products while others think that it
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more common so that
people
don’t
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by it. I shall discuss both
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and I think that
advertisement
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advertisements
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can lead to
force
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people
to buy things
still
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now.
To begin
with,
people
who say,
commercial
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campaign is extremely
effectual
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to convince
people
to buy things think that
it
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they
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have
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the ability to force
people
to purchase useful materials when they watched it.
People
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mind is very curious, thereby if they
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by
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try to achieve it at any cost
as a result
commercial
publicity
can be a necessary tool to convince
people
to buy the things which they watched.
This
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lead
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to
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the
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profit of
business
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.
For instance
, a few days ago, I ordered a digital
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which I
seen
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on
a
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AD
on Facebook.
Although
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it
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due to
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infatuate me.
Therefore
, the more
advertisement
did a company
, the
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higher chance
their
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will be to get more
order
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.
On the other hand
, others who say that
people
are giving less attention
on
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due to
its
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turn to common assert that
advertisement
loose
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its
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popularity because of the rise of fake
publicity
and
people
used
it
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them
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alarmingly. Many businessmen are misusing it by publishing
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Ad
. Because of it,
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a group
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of individuals faces cheating to identify the right
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resulting in
people
became
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more aware and careful about advertising possible leading to
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creating
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a negative
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outcome
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outcome
about
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on
people
’s
mind
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.
This
has
lead
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to force
people
to ignore it when they watched it.
For example
, it is often observed that nowadays most of the time get
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product
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products
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if they order
it
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them
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from
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after seeing
a
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on social sited and order
it
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them
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by
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online.
Thus
, human beings became more aware
about
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any commercial
publicity
. In conclusion, commercial
publicity
creates the path
to
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business
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a business
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owner
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owners
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to
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extend
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extand
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expand
their
business
and gets more profit. Some
people
think it is become
auccessful
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successful
at convincing us to purchase accessories whereas others think that it turned to common
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today
todays
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that
people
tend to ignore it. I think that
deapite
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despite
of some reasons
advertisement
loose it’s popularity, it is still effective to persuade consumers to buy reliable products.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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