More and more people are relying on their private cars as a major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.

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It is observed that the number of

people

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who depends on their own

cars

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main transportation is significantly increasing. There are some problems

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be caused by

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phenomenon, but there are

also

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some solutions to tackle the issue.

such

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phenomena

phenomenon

phenomenona

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phenomenon

result

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results

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in many problems. the

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problem would be

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issue

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. The more private

cars

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are used, the more

air

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pollution

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can be caused.

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, every transportation releases

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carbon

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dioxide

when they are moved, and it causes

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air

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pollution

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, if

people

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choose not public transportations but their own

cars

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, the number of

cars

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which moved has

increase

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the

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more CO2 would be released by it. The

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one is

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traffic

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a traffic

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jam

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. the number of

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private

cars

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which are used is too much compared with the limited road and in the end, it causes

traffic

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jam

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, there

some

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keys which can solve it. The

first

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solution is

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encouraging

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people

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to use

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public

transportations

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. It reduces not only

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pollution

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but

also

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traffic

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jam

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, rising the independence

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private

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a private

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one

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. The

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key is

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encouraging

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people

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to use

the

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electric

cars

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, which utilize electricity for

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fuel. It makes

air

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pollution

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be reduced, reducing

release

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the release

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of CO2. The

last

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key is

that

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widening the road. It decreases the

traffic

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jam

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increasing the amount of treating

transportations

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transportation

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. In conclusion,

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relying on their private

cars

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makes lots of

problem

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problems

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they

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can be solved by doing

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things mentioned above.

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people

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should be encouraged to do

such

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things.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Over-reliance
Transportation
Environmental degradation
Air pollution
Greenhouse gas emissions
Noise pollution
Traffic congestion
Urban sprawl
Natural resources
Fossil fuels
Sedentary lifestyle
Public transportation
Carpooling
Ridesharing
Urban planning
Mixed-use developments
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