More and more people are relying on their private cars as a major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.

It is observed that the number of
people
who depends on their own
cars
as
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main transportation is significantly increasing. There are some problems
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be caused by
this
phenomenon, but there are
also
some solutions to tackle the issue.
such
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phenomena
phenomenon
phenomenona
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phenomenon
result
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in many problems. the
first
problem would be
environmental
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an environmental
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issue
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. The more private
cars
are used, the more
air
pollution
can be caused.
For example
, every transportation releases
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carbon
dioxyde
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dioxide
when they are moved, and it causes
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air
pollution
.
Moreover
, if
people
choose not public transportations but their own
cars
, the number of
cars
which moved has
increase
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.
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,
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more CO2 would be released by it. The
second
one is
traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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jams
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. the number of
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private
cars
which are used is too much compared with the limited road and in the end, it causes
traffic
jam
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jams
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.
Nevertheless
, there
some
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keys which can solve it. The
first
solution is
that
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encouraging
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people
to use
the
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public
transportations
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. It reduces not only
air
pollution
but
also
traffic
jam
, rising the independence
on
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private
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a private
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one
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. The
second
key is
that
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encouraging
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encourage
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people
to use
the
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electric
cars
, which utilize electricity for
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fuel. It makes
air
pollution
be reduced, reducing
release
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the release
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of CO2. The
last
key is
that
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widening the road. It decreases the
traffic
jam
as
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by
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increasing the amount of treating
transportations
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transportation
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. In conclusion,
although
relying on their private
cars
makes lots of
problem
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problems
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,
it
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they
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can be solved by doing
such
things mentioned above.
Thus
,
people
should be encouraged to do
such
things.
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