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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are reasons for this? How can people research this?

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Nowadays the
amount
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 of
people
 who want to know about the
history
 of their building
are
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increased
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 in some countries.
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eager
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 to know about that and how they can obtain
information
 about that. There are several reasons why
people
 are enthusiastic to know about their property’s
history
. The
first
 one is because some of them think a famous person lived there or a famous architect designed it and it is fantastic to them.
For example
, about 100 years ago maybe a well-known writer lived there or maybe it
used
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 as a shelter during world war. Another reason is
because
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 they want to know what materials their building was made of. It is so important to know because not only they can evaluate their building power against
earthquake
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 but
also
 if they want to renovate it, it will be crucial.
People
 who want to know about their house’s
history
 can catch
information
 from different resources. The main resource is asking from local government because they usually archived all
information
 about buildings that
located
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 near them. Another way is
search
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 on the internet because nowadays there
are
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 a lot of useful
information
 about everything that you want. So it is quite possible to find your house
history
.
Finally
, you can ask
from
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neighbors
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 who have lived there for long years. They usually know who had lived there before you. In conclusion, these days
people
 are keen to know about
their buildings
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the history of their building
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history
 because they want to evaluate the power of building against earthquake, know who lived or who designed it or to renovate it. They can obtain
information
 about their house by asking from local government,
search
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 on the internet or asking
from
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neighbors
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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