The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The below chart illustrated buying and renting accommodation percentage of
households
in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overall
, the percentage of people living in England and Wales who used to live in
rent
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households
decreased with
the
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respect
of
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time.
In contrast
, The rate of people buying their own house increased within the given time duration.
Moreover
,
the
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1971 was the year when both types of
residential
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the residential
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population
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populations
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were equal.
To begin
with, more than 75% of
households
settled in rented living quarters in 1918 and
it
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was the highest rate in the whole period.
However
, the
percent
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steadily decreased from 78% in 1918 to 59% in 1961
then
dropped drastically until 2001 and remained
just
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over 30%. The figure
also
showed a gradual
increased
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in 2011 which is around 36%.
On the other hand
,
households
in the owned accommodation were not popular taking around 22% in 1918.
Nevertheless
, the figure rose with fluctuation and reached its peak in the year 2001
just
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below 70%.
Afterward
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, the popularity of
households
in owned
house
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houses
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fall slightly by 5% in 2011.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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