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Advantages and disavantages of moving abroad. Discuss both and give ur opinion?

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Nowadays, studying or working in a foreign country is done growingly by many people, especially by young adults, as living abroad is really an exciting adventure.
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good and bad sides. So, we need to think carefully before making any decisions. Let’s begin by discussing one of the advantages of living overseas, which is a chance to have a fresh start. There will be a change of scenery. We will meet many people from different countries, learn
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 cultural backgrounds,
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 and can explore new foods.
Secondly
, we can get
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personal growth by moving abroad. Living away from home makes us
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 more independent and get us the courage to cope with various difficulties. By living abroad, we can acquire language skills and qualifications that may open up opportunities for us.
On the other hand
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 are the big issues. We may struggle with everyday life activities until we can cope with language
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 food and cultural differences. Another problem is that we need to create our new surroundings, which means we have to make new friends. We have to adapt
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 new social rules and try to fit
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 the community. If not, we will feel like an outsider and will be hard to get
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 from people around us.
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. In conclusion, moving abroad clearly has both positives and negatives to be considered. Whatever we choose to do, we should be happy with our decision and should be sure with our attitude not to get regrets after things happened. In my opinion, living overseas for a period of time can lead to a better life and get us
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unforgettable
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unforgettable
 memories.
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