Many people believe that cloths or costumes are more responsible for the occurrence of rape. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, rape cases are increasing throughout the world, Some believe that the primary reason for
this
is due to the
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dress which is worn by the victim. I disagree with
this
statement because rape can happen due to personal revenge and a
lack
of awareness in society. Many rape cases around the old have happened due to personal issues. many
people
who cannot resolve their issues in a peaceful manner are the ones who take
this
extreme step in order to damage the other person's image in society.
For Example
, One of my friends who had been involved recently in
such
a case has been put behind the bar, the reason was that they were friends since childhood and their parents were having an issue with disputed land. because of
this
, they both stop talking to each other. The
second
reason is the
lack
of fear among the
people
, many think that they can escape punishment even if they murder someone and no one is going to do anything for them. Recently the Time of India survey found out that, many wrongdoing
people
are roaming freely despite committing
such
crimes is a
lack
of punishment among the public. The Government should impose strict rules and impose laws to punish severely.
further
, educate
people
and let them know that, committing
such
is an in human behaviour. In conclusion, rapes happen due to many reasons
such
as personal issues and to damage the image of other families
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and
lack
of education. I disagree that it occurs because of costumes and clothes.
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