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Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change while others think it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#believe #people #efforts #fight #climate #change
The impacts of unscrupulous activities
towards
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 mankind have already started showing as a curse to nature. Nature, like our own mother,
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 undergone enormous pressure and causative factors and alarmingly the limits are reached. The effects of industrialisation, rapid use of networking activities and
fast growing
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 urbanisation have always been the prime role player
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 the changes observed in climate. While the summer is considerably broadened in some parts of the earth causing the draught and less fertility, the other zone is receiving a good amount of downpour throughout the year. As we have already been habituated to
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 with
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modern amenities in
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luxurious life, it has become difficult for us to avoid the importance of globalisation.
Additionally
, it is pertinent to mention that someone should be habituated to live
accepting
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 the change without ignoring the importance of growing civilization.
However
, the other opinion says that we must be responsible enough to take various measures to combat the problem. In my opinion, it is
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 to say that we cannot be able to live ignoring the relevance and
dependance
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dependence
dependent
 on constant growth in technology. With
this
 we must be responsible and wise enough to plant trees
in
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both
indoor
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 and outdoor, save water, cut down the usage of plastics and take appropriate actions against
uprooting
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of
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big trees. That will be a wise way to combat the change without ignoring the need
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 urbanisation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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