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The given line graph illustrates the average
amount
 of Carbon Dioxide emitted by each
person
 in four countries, namely
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal over a 40-year period starting from 1967. In general, it can be clearly seen that the CO2
amount
 which was emitted by an English and a Swede
decrease
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decreased
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 significantly throughout the given period while Italy and Portugal saw a rapid rise in their average CO2
emissions
.
Moreover
,
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 Kingdom always placed
first
 in the
amount
 of CO2 emitted per
person
 during the given time.
Firstly
, between 1967 and 1977, we saw a steep increase in the CO2 emission
amount
 of Italy and Portugal, to just above 6 metric
tonnes
 and over 2 metric
tonnes
, respectively. The
next
 20 years still saw a significant upward trend in the CO2
emissions
 of Portugal, rising to more than 5 metric
tonnes
.
In contrast
, Italy's
amount
 of CO2 emitted by each
person
 started to slow down. It only increases by more than one metric
tonnes
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tonne
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 compared to the 3-metric-tonne increase in Portugal. During the
last
 10 years, both
countries's
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countries'
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 level of CO2
emissions
 seemed to level off at roughly 5.5 metric
tonnes
 in Portugal and over 7.5 metric
tonnes
 in Italy
On the other hand
, the average
amount
 of CO2 emitted into the air of
United
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the United
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 Kingdom remained the highest over the given period with a gradual decrease from around 11 to about 7 metric
tonnes
. The CO2
emissions
 per
person
 in Sweden reached the peak at approximately 10 metric
tonnes
 in 1977 and
then
 rapidly went down to 7 metric
tonnes
 in 1987. The
last
 20 years observed a gradual drop in the CO2
amount
 emitted by each
person
 in Sweden.
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