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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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 jobs in underdeveloped nations are immigrating to rich countries for better income.
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 brain drain can lead to various problems in a person's home
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, but there are some steps that can be taken to eradicate
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 growing problem. The following paragraphs explain these
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. Immigration has increased over the past years. There are numerous drawbacks that a
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 faces when its skilled labour prefers to
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 abroad.
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, a poor
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 suffers a
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 setback as it loses its manpower,
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 its progress is affected. When
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 move to a foreign land with the hope of better quality of life, they not only take their skills with them but
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 take away their
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's future,
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 a poor
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 becomes poorer.
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, the citizens of the home
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 have to bear the expense of brain drain, they have very less facilities available in their
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 to meet their needs of health and education. Despite, all the above issues that a
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 faces due to the immigration of skilled labour, there are some measures that can be taken by the government in
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 direction.
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 and foremost, the government should
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 towards creating more employment in the
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 so that
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 in their own
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.
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, the government can collaborate with renowned foreign companies as
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 will help a
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 in two ways. On one hand, it will improve job prospects,
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, employees in these companies will be paid better.
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, more and more
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 would prefer to
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 in their own
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. To conclude, there are various challenges that a
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 faces after losing its skilled labour like fewer facilities and the low growth rate of its economy, but increasing employment opportunities and collaboration with foreign companies can prove beneficial in fulfiling
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's dream to earn more money, thereby reducing emigration.
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