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Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (eg cost, environment). Discuss both views and give opinion.

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It is a debatable issue,that administration should spend fund on public
transport
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 while others view it should be spent on others priorities.In
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 essay,I will discuss both these views and give my opinion. To commence with, the best and easy way of travelling is public transit
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 as trains and buses.To epitome, as
government
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 transit is cheap so high-level authorities should invest more and more
money
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 in
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 public sector.
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, as it takes less time one should travel from one place to another very easily.Henceforth,as it is very affordable anyone can travel.On a private ,vehicle a big amount of cash is spent which is not possible for common
people
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.
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,most of the masses prefer to use
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 transit.
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,Every year during the budget session Indian authorities invest a big sum of
money
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 to promote public
transport
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.
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, the income of the
government
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also
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 increases.
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,some
people
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 think that
government
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 should invest
money
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 in other sectors like the environment and so on.To explain, other topics are
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 as important as public
transport
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 topics.Some
people
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 think that pollution, of the
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environment is so vital that high administration should take extreme steps.Due to modernization environment is changing day by day so it is the duty of our
government
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 to take serious note of it.
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,during the
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 few ,years countries now know the risks of global warming and taking serious steps.
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,a huge amount of
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 is spent on these published-related issues. In my opinion, in a time of ,recession the
government
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 should
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 think for the common
people
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 and promote public
transport
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. To conclude, Other issues are
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 important but the administration
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 thinks about the masses and their needs.
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