Many people today prefer socializing online rather than socializing in local communities. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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age, many
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opt for socializing online rather than socializing in the local communities.
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development brings some
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benefits
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benefits
to young generations, I strongly believe that it
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in the long run. It cannot be denied that socializing online is an excellent choice for a host of
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,especially,
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does not allow them
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in the local communities, socializing online is the best choice for them. It brings connivence because
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at their own time.
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, the modern lifestyle is hectic and does not leave much free time
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anyone, thanks to communicating online
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apps
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have a host of opportunities to talk to friends around the world to explore culture and open-mindedness.
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, socializing in the local communities
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brings some significant benefits. Face-to-face communication
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been shown many advantages both
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individuals and to society. Lack of communication
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will take a toll on their skillset as communication is employers’ most required soft skill at the moment. So, talking or hanging out with friends will increase physical as well as mental interaction.
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, engaging in conversations with others in real life can tighten relationships more than online conversations. In conclusion,
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socializing online is the best choice for some
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, I do not think that all
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should not communicate only online.
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trend would not be beneficial in long run to both individuals and society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socializing
  • local communities
  • advantages
  • outweigh
  • disadvantages
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • connect
  • range of people
  • diverse
  • global communities
  • self-expression
  • creativity
  • communication
  • networking skills
  • lack
  • face-to-face interaction
  • social skills
  • empathy
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • addiction
  • excessive
  • screen time
  • privacy
  • security concerns
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