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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trus, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagre with this opinion?

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Nowadays, Social media plays a vital role in
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 modern era. Some communities believe that
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 are getting value based on their social
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 and financial
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 while some other communities argue with
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 matter and they think that Old-fashioned values
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 play a vital role for an individual. In
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 essay, I will discuss both scenarios and
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 I will give my opinion on
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 matter. On the one side, In
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 materialistic era, most
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 are giving priority to social
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 and financial
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.
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 are getting treated based on their wealth in recent times. Even a person with bad behaviour is getting treated well because of his/her financial
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 or he/she is from a famous family.
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, A hero's son is
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 becoming a hero in the film industry even though he doesn't know the acting due to the hero's financial
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 and fame. On the other side, Old-fashioned values have their importance too. Being kind to others, respecting elders, and being true to others
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 have great value in some societies. Being true to others is more important compared to being wealthy.
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, A person with old-fashioned valued like, honour, kindness, etc. is treated in a great way compared to a person with financial
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. To sum up, I think, in
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 modern and materialistic era most
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 are given more importance nowadays meanwhile old-fashioned values
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 have their own importance in
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 society.
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