Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past.what are the caurses and solutions of this problem

Nowadays , the young generation is going into the dark side and
also
they lost their diamond as a culture .
In addition
, they become an aggressive and disrespectful person so
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this
problem and gives some useful
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First
of all, the main reason is that technology because they use
such
kind of activity which do not give knowledge and information ,
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, today's generation is wasting their golden time on the devices and
also
uses some dark website
that is
help them to make a person into the devil,
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they are lost their rights which gave from their parents.
Moreover
, the film sector
also
has some contribution to
this
problem because they show some advanced level scenes in the movie
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some films that were banned in the country because of their script so that they cannot spread dirt in it.
However
, Here is a solution for the above problems foremost is that guardians should take care of a child that what are they doing ? ,
For instance
, you should say that you must do study
first
then
you will do any kind of activities.
secondly
, the law should give the notice to remove the scene
otherwise
we should Ban it as some films are not allowed to show minor people,
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it cannot negatively impact
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them. In conclusion , people should wake up and try to solve
this
problem because children are tomorrow's main so the government
also
must take a decision about it.
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