Write about the following topic: Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations. Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people? Give reasons for your answer.

To gain hands-on experience of theoretical subject knowledge gained during graduation, I have actively worked on several projects in college. I developed a Java-based mobile application in Android Studio for landmark recognition. The objective was to help tourists get information about the monument by scanning the actual landmark through an application.
Also
, I used a touch screen panel of the UTLP (Unified Technology Learning Platform) kit to control the electric home appliances like fans and lights
instead
of using traditional switches making it more feasible for handicapped people. My active participation in various co-curricular, as well as extra-curricular activities, has helped me develop qualities like leadership, team player and
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with diverse people. I have volunteered for SCIENTIA’15 , Techfest of our college where we as a team of 15 people ideated and designed events
such
as programming quizzes, workshops and seminars. I have passed two Classical Dance exams organized by AKHIL BHARTIYA GANDHARVA MAHAVIDYALAYA MANDAL MUMBAI, an institution for the promotion and propagation of Indian classical music and dance in 2009 and 2011.
Also
, I have been part of blood donation drives under the NSS (National Service Scheme) campaigns which is a Central Sector Scheme of the Government of India. During campus placement, I joined the French multinational company ATOS as Graduate Engineer Trainee. I got an opportunity to
work
on cutting-edge tools like RTC, GitHub and HPALM where I was responsible for extracting the
data
from SQL databases to present valuable insights in the form of reports as per stakeholder's requirements within the shorter deadline. While working, I have developed strong proficiency in C++, Java, SQL and
data
visualization tools like Microsoft Power BI, and Excel. I have consistently upskilled myself by getting certified in Java and Oracle SQL databases. With my deep domain knowledge and sheer hard
work
, I got promoted to Associate Consultant. With a
work
experience of 4+ years in the IT industry, I found my passion in
data
science and would like to
further
enrich my knowledge and skills by pursuing a Master’s in
Data
Science which will broaden my career options. I always wanted to study in a foreign university to explore a new education system, new challenges and a global platform to meet folk around the globe to learn their way of thinking and learning.
Besides
, it makes you independent and strong while enhancing your management skills. Ireland has top globally recognized universities known for their high-quality education and research-oriented studies which opens up a global platform to explore. It has close links to industry and is characterized by creativity, flexibility, and pragmatism. The country is home to leading global MNCs which opens up a lot of career opportunities. I come with relevant
work
experience and strong academic background, I hope the committee share my confidence to give me an opportunity
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