IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negetive development?

#people #technology #relationships #negetive #development
There is no doubt that
technology
 and its improvements in the previous decades have made
impacts
Fix the agreement mistake
impact
show examples
 on
Correct your spelling
human's
humen's
Change noun form
humans'
show examples
 interaction with each other.
This
 has positive and negative effects. The following essay will discuss the manners of
relationships
 being
chaned
Correct your spelling
changed
 by
technology
 and its good and bad consequences. Since the great invention of Alexander Graham Bell, the telephone, There have been constant changes in
relationships
, education and, social life.
Fix the agreement mistake
Telephones
show examples
Telephone
Correct article usage
The telephone
show examples
 helped
people
 to talk to each other from long distances which led to its popularity.
As a result
, many
face to face
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
show examples
 meetings in a single day were replaced by phone calls, and
people
 tend to talk to each other on phone rather than
visiting
Wrong verb form
visit
show examples
 each other. After
heyday
Add an article
the heyday
show examples
 of
Correct article usage
the telephone's
show examples
telephone's
Change noun form
telephone
show examples
usage
Add a comma
,usage
show examples
 both scientists' courage to develop communication technologies and
world
Correct article usage
the world
show examples
 wide web's progress formed new
equipments
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
show examples
such
 as emails, short text message services, and
Add a hyphen
internet-based
show examples
internet based
Add a hyphen
internet-based
show examples
 messengers that altered
relationships
 by far. Nowadays, it is very common to interact with others using mobiles. On the one hand, these developments can be extremely positive. When there is a great distance between two
people
this
 is the easiest way to communicate by using
technology
. Affordable expenses of new era's ways of interaction is another benefit of
such
 techs.
On the other hand
, the
first
 negative point is that
such
 developments may lead to loneliness.
People
 will meet each other less than before
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 and will be more isolated each day.
Finally
, texts and emails may cause misinterpretations which is a result of
lack
Correct article usage
a lack
show examples
 of tone in written messages. To sum up,
technology
 has certainly changed
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
relationships
, and
this
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
 caused positive and
Correct your spelling
negative
negetive
Correct your spelling
negative
 results.
Submitted by saminansari98 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: