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Information about the number of hospital beds per 1000 citizens as well as the medium forecasted lifetime in various nations is illustrated in the graph and table
accordingly
.
To begin
 with, there are approximately similar figures among Canada, Spain, the United Kingdom along with the United States (from around 3.6 to 3.8), while Australia together with the Netherlands
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 4 and 4.4 bedsteads respectively.
Nevertheless
, the countries mentioned above are pale in comparison with Germany (8 beds) as well as Japan (accurately 14 beds). Regarding countries’ expenses on healthcare, data of Japan, the Netherlands and the United States is displayed, whereas others are not. To go into more details Japan spends $2581 and the average life is 83, the Netherlands pay out $3481 along with 80 years of medium life expectancy predicted and,
finally
, the US expend $6719 with 78 years of life expected. In a nutshell, the is a strong tendency between the number of bedsteads in medical institutions and the citizens’ average lifetime.
In other words
, the treatment of patients is more efficient than consuming a great deal of money on it.
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