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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is well-known that today's study program is being developed. And due to the changes some people tend to think that students should be divided taking into account their academic level,
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 mixed classes have no advantages.
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 of these schools are against to advantages
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Submitted by Mezun 2023 on

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