In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Today there are so many advanced
technologies
available for farming . with that
technology
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you can easily achieve the expected harvest . but
still
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there
is
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so many
people
who do not have anything to eat . they are
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can be various reasons for that , like poor
countries
do not have
access
to them and they do not have enough
money
to buy them. Anyhow these problems can be sold with some steps. I am going to explain the rest below. On the one hand, only developed
countries
have
access
to the new
technologies
because poor
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don't
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have enough knowledge to operate them . 90% of hungry
people
live in poor states they do not have new technology or good education so they cannot advantage
from
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new
things
.
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, according to
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new research, 25% of the
people
in Kenya died due to the food store shortage .
other
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things
is
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they do not have enough
money
to buy advanced
things
. They cannot afford that kind of
things
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.
furthermore
, they need
sufficient
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amount of
money
to buy
things
. other
countries
not going to sell their
technologies
free
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.
thus
, poor
countries
do not have
access
or
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enough
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enough
money
to develop their agriculture.
on the other hand
,
however
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governments can help to solve
this
problem. they can reduce prices on agricultural items, so even poor
people
can buy them.
For instance
, cut taxes or introduce new payment methods. they can open some institute/educational
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for
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farmers
famers
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farmers
, so they can study new methods and
technologies
. When
,
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they
well
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educated about
that
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agriculture, they can easily get
good
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harvest. so, they can solve
this
problem by giving good education and reducing prices. In conclusion, most
of
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people
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the people
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in the world still suffer from
starving
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. The reasons can be, limited
access
and insufficient amount of
money
.
moreover
, it can be sold by educating
people
and reducing prices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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