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Some people believe that increasing tax on various industries will reduce pollution whereas others believe that there are better alternative ways. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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Many today argue that the environment can be best protected by heavily taxing various
industries
. In my opinion, though
this
 has worked in certain cases, taxation is not as effective as more positive reforms. The case for
taxing
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 industry is that it will discourage the worst practices of
companies
.
This
 has been evidenced in the European Union where enterprises are taxed at higher rates, oftentimes depending on their relative carbon footprints. The result is that businesses are incentivized to adopt cleaner energy practices. The
companies
 that are greener can
therefore
 enjoy both the benefits of reduced taxes and the public opinion boost concomitant with eco-friendly initiatives. The caveat to
this
 approach is that many multinationals are able to simply move their production facilities and waste to nearby nations.
Moreover
, there are more positive policies that can encourage, rather than discourage, the corporate world. Taxation is a fundamentally reactive measure that supposes
companies
 would not wish to inherently protect the planet. A more proactive approach would involve funding green
industries
.
For example
,
companies
such
 as Tesla have received billions in government subsidies to build stability for
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green industry. Over time, more
companies
 will be able to establish themselves and turn profits and there will be less of a need to use taxes to discourage
industries
 from polluting.
This
 solution will be
longer
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 lasting as it rewards good
behavior
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instead
 of punishing bad
behavior
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. In conclusion, despite taxing
industries
 having an immediate effect, a greater impact would result from subsidies for various
companies
. Governments should pursue
this
 more positive strategy.
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