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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #st #century #life #quality #times
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The lifestyle of people is changing every moment and
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everyday
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human
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 population is increasing gradually with the increase in demand
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 health and job.
This
 rush was much less when compared to the older generation.
Life
 was
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 years back from now.According to my opinion,we are having much better lifestyle than our grandparents as
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 will explain. Nowadays,due to more and more research and health facility,awareness
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 decreased
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 of
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.More and more scope of
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 as well as working options
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increase
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 for both men and women.
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this
 busy lifestyle is leading to
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 social
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21st century
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 individual compared to the ones who
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 born and lived
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life
 decades before. Meanwhile,the older generation had a lot more fun and leisure time
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compared to us.They had
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 their personal and social
life
 in a better manner than the people of today.
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,medical and other technological facilities were very limited at that time.People were much happier
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 the previous times.The 21st century has
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surged with mental disorders due to
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 job load and lack of social
life
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,both current and previous centuries had their respective pros and cons.It is always wise to look forward along with the beneficiary part of
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 time in which we are living.
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Upgradation
 is always necessary and it is a continuous process and it will be carried along with the coming years.But we must never forget
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where we came from.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Quality of life
  • Technological advances
  • Healthcare systems
  • Life expectancy
  • Information access
  • Digital tools
  • Comfort and convenience
  • Modern conveniences
  • Mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Urbanization
  • Human rights
  • Social advancement
  • Life satisfaction
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