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ncreasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
It is sometimes
people
 argued that the higher petrol price, the fewer issues about traffic and pollution. I partly agree with
this
 and I believe that governments can take others steps to improve
this
 situation. To a certain ,extent I agree that improving petrol's price in some ways can reduce the usage rate of private cars.
People
 prefer to take public
transport
 while commute time. There will be fewer cars in the streets, and
this
 can solve traffic congestion and air pollution temporarily.
However
, higher petrol prices can cause inconvenience in
people
's lives and will encourage fossil fuel companies to invest more money in it.
For example
,
people
 who live in rural areas and work in central cities will have more living costs on
transport
. The most important point is if they take public
transport
, it will take them more hours for commuting. It really wastes time. In the long term, if we really want to address these issues, on one hand, we must find alternatives to fossil fuels. Governments can invest in renewable sources
such
 as solar power, wind power and water power. They can encourage source companies by giving their bonus if the renewable sources can be applied to both public and private
transport
.
On the other hand
, businesses can encourage workers to work in their homes, so there will be less pollution caused by private cars.
This
also
 gives staff more flexible time to manage their balance between work and life. In conclusion, I argued that if we can follow the measures mentioned above, in the future we can see a better environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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