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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a bussinessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this bussinessman. In your letter • remind him when and where you met • tell him what kind of job you are interested in • say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to bring your attention towards a statement that you have made about offering a job in one of your places.
Firstly
, I want to remind you that we met each other on 6th July at Chicago Airport.
Also
, I was sitting right next to you on seat number B03.
Secondly
, you told me a lot about your business. You said that you have
plethora
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 of restaurants and you advised me to take a place in one of them.
Additionally
, you mentioned that I have to contact you directly about
this
 situation.
Thirdly
, I am really into cooking. So,
that is
 why I want to be a cook at your Turkish restaurant. I highly recommend you
to
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choose me ,
due to
 my knowledge of cooking skills. I worked as a chef at a restaurant called Canada a year ago. I left my position because of my studies. Now I have graduated
the
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 University of California and my major
was
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 engineering .
However
, I am not interested in
this
 job. So, I decided to be
food
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 preparer. I can say that I am
master
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 at cooking. My previous manager said all good
thing
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 about me. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Mohinur
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grammar
Make sure to proofread for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrases to improve clarity and coherence.
content
Consider elaborating more on your relevant experience and skills to strengthen your suitability for the job.
tone
The letter opens and closes with polite and appropriate greetings, maintaining a suitable tone throughout.
task achievement
The main points are clearly addressed, including where and when you met, the job you're interested in, and why you're suitable for the job.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Hospitality industry, culinary arts, managerial skills, customer service, gastronomy, adept, team player, interpersonal skills, innovative, culinary expertise, food connoisseur, dynamic environment, business acumen, networking opportunity, mentorship, gourmet, epicurean, food enthusiast, resilience, career aspirations
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