ome people believe that increasing tax on various industries will reduce pollution whereas others believe that there are better alternative ways. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

The world is
bedeviled
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by monstrous environmental hazards
such
as
pollution
. There are conflicting views about whether
increasing
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tax
on various
industries
would be an effective remedy to reduce
pollution
or
other
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alternative measures can be taken to address
this
problem. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the
idea
of
increasing
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tax
, as there would be consequences of
this
idea
and
also
, there appear to be more constructive solutions. In the forthcoming
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I will expound my thoughts in
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. To commence with, adherents to the
idea
of increasing
tax
on factories, appeal to
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fact that
industries
are considerably causing
pollution
and imposing
higher
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tax
would act as a deterrent. To elaborate on it more, waste caused by factories dumped into bodies of water
,
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taints the water.
Consequently
, it brings about water crisis and health problems for humans.
Furthermore
,
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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gas emissions caused by the
industries
, potentially lead to air
pollution
,
deteriorating
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global warming.
That is
why, some believe governments should place
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strain on these companies' owners , in order to prevent them from causing more
pollution
.
Although
,
initially
, the
idea
of higher
tax
might seem a practical solution,in my opinion, according to its repercussions it is not a long-term effective solution .
Firstly
, offsetting
this
financial strain put on them,
industries
' owners may decide to increase the price of their products, contributing to putting people under financial pressure and devaluing the country's currency.
Secondly
, other initiatives
such
as banning
the
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industrial
manufacture
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to prevent them from causing more
pollution
,until the owners come up with a method in which goods are produced with less damage to the environment,
seems
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more reasonable and efficient. To conclude,
although
, an increase in financial burden
such
as
tax
might be a short-term solution, I am firmly convinced that, its consequences outweigh the benefits,
hence
, other measures had better be taken .
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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