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Some people believe that the internet is increasing the gap between the rich and poo, while others argue that it help to reduce the gap. Discuss both views and give your opinion

INTERNET
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 USAGE HAS BEEN INCREASINGLY PROGRESSING AROUND THE WORLD;
HOWEVER
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, SOME THINK THAT IT IS AFFECTING THE RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN TWO COMMUNITY SECTORS; LESS PRIVILEGE AND MORE PRIVILEGE.
THIS
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 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS. THE MAIN REASON FOR THE INCREASED
GAP
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 BETWEEN THE RICH AND THE POOR COMMUNITY IS BECAUSE OF THE LEVEL OF INSECURITY.
THIS
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 IS MAINLY BECAUSE TECHNOLOGY GIVES
SOCIETY
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 ACCESS TO OTHER
PEOPLE
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'S LIVES.
FOR INSTANCE
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, SOCIAL MEDIA PLATFORMS LIKE FACEBOOK, INSTAGRAM AND TIKTOK. MORE OFTEN THAN NOT SOME
PEOPLE
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 FELT INSECURE IF SOMEONE IS MORE PRIVILEGED THAN THEM. AS A ,RESULT THEY ISOLATE THEMSELVES AND FELT THAT THEY DO NOT BELONG. IN MY OPINION, THE INCREASING
GAP
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 IN THE
SOCIETY
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 IS MORE OF A PERSONAL ASPECT WHERE HUMANS WILL BE ABLE TO COPE OVER TIME. 
ON THE CONTRARY
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, USING THE
INTERNET
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 CREATES A STATE OF SOCIAL AWARENESS,
THUS
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 REDUCING THE
GAP
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 AT ALMOST ALL
SOCIETY
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 LEVELS. IT PROVIDES VITAL INFORMATION ABOUT WEATHER CALAMITIES, HEALTH AND ECONOMIC CRISIS, WHERE THESE DATA TRIGGERS THE COMMUNITY TO WORK HAND IN HAND, HELPING EACH OTHER REGARDLESS OF THEIR STATUS IN LIFE.
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 "COVID PANDEMIC" PAVES THE WAY FOR THE RICH
PEOPLE
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 TO EXTEND HELP TO THEIR LESS FORTUNATE FELLOWMEN AND IN RETURN, THEY EXPRESS THEIR GRATITUDE BY POSTING ONLINE, RESULTING IN MORE PRIVILEGED
PEOPLE
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 HELPING AND CONTRIBUTING. ALL OF THESE RESULT IN A DECREASED
GAP
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 BETWEEN THE RICH AND THE POOR. I PERSONALLY BELIEVE THAT USING THE
INTERNET
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 CREATES MORE UNDERSTANDING RATHER THAN A
GAP
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 IN THE
SOCIETY
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.  TO CONCLUDE, UTILIZING THE
INTERNET
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 INCREASES THE
GAP
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 BETWEEN THE RICH AND THE POOR BECAUSE OF PERSONAL INSECURITIES;
HOWEVER
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, THE AWARENESS IT CREATES ALLEVIATE WHATEVER THE
GAP
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 IS. IN MY OPINION, THE
INTERNET
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 REDUCES MORE GAPS IN THE
SOCIETY
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 AND YIELDS TO A MORE POSITIVE OUTCOME.

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