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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do man working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

#people #exercise #time #health #man
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 pictures compare the layout design of the university sports centre as it is in the present with a proposed site design for the future
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 Overall, a glance at the graph reveals that the main building in the present will be remained unchanged, whereas
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 outdoor courts are planned to be knocked down to give place to new facilities, connecting to the old building. The entrance door and reception along with the 25m pool, seating and changing room will not be demolished in the future.
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, there will be changes in terms of the gym, which will be doubled in its length.
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 outdoor courts, which are located to the east and west of the old building will be converted into one single building with a plethora of facilities. In the future, there will be
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 main buildings,
such
 as a leisure pool and sports hall with
two
 dance studios, located on the original site of the right and left outdoor court respectively. On the left of the doorway will be situated a sports shop and on the right side a café.
Two
 more changing rooms will appear. They will be positioned on the south corners of the building.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • physical activity
  • motivation
  • interest
  • stress
  • fatigue
  • exhaustion
  • fitness facilities
  • outdoor spaces
  • technology
  • sedentary leisure activities
  • awareness
  • importance
  • health
  • unhealthy lifestyle choices
  • poor diet
  • smoking
  • workplace culture
  • work-life balance
  • time constraints
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