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You are planning to study abroad. Write a letter of inquiry to • give your brief personal information; •ask for the terms of admission into that university • ask for the possibility of getting a scholarship Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

#study #inquiry #information #•ask #terms #admission #university #possibility #scholarship #addresses
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to inquire about
the
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graduate admission into
the
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Queens
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 University. I am a general practitioner working in China. After practising in
this
 community for 5 years, I realize that I would like to pursue a
master
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 degree in public
health
. I want to focus on how to promote public
health
 as a family physician. The
master
 of
public
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health
 curriculum
in
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 Queens University is one of the top-ranking
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programmes
programs
programms
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programs
. I hope to apply for I am wondering whether you could send the terms of admission into the
master
 of
public
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health
 programme to me. The listed information
at
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 your website is not complete.
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, I would like to know the requirement for the language test.
In addition
, is there a possibility to apply for a scholarship as
a medical professionals
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 working in another country? I would be grateful
that
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if you could send me the detailed information. I am looking forward to hearing you. I hope to become a future
master
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 student
in
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the
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Queens
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 University. Yours sincerely, Ada
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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