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It has been said, Not everything that is learned is contained in books. Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important?Why?

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Introduction
People are learning and
practicing
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 throughout their life. I believe that
experiences
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 and practices are the basic reasons
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 human evolution. In my opinion
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gain
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 from
books
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 plays important role in
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persons
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person
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 life.
Body paragraph 1
The most advantages of the
books
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 are that they hold
knowledge
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 and
experiences
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 of people,who are
expert
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 in their respective fields. People write
their
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about their
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 discoveries and
experiences
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 in
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books
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.
this
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knowledge
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 is accumulated in
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 that are passed from generation to generation. By taking
experiences
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 from
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 and through new data, they make new inventions. In
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 case
books
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 are the holders of
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humankind's
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humankind's
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 experience.
Body paragraph 2
To move forward, we have to get fundamental
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, which we get through various
books
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. Inventions, New conclusion
are depend
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 on the basic
knowledge
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 of the
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people
peolple
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people
.
Body paragraph 3
For
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examples
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at
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in
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old
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the old
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 times they thought
earth
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the earth
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 is flat. It was concluded from observations and studies.
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However
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 the
next
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 generation,using
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experiences
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the experiences
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if
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of
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 ancestors
,
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apply
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 proved that
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the earth
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 is round.
Conclusion
To summarize,
i
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 think
person
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a person
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 should take basic
knowledge
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 from
books
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because
becuse
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because
 it will help him to make his own invention.

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