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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Along with the popularity of technology, most
people
 used to view daily
news
 via their
smartphone
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, whereas some
people
 still went to
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the store
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store
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 and bought
physical
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newspaper
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newspapers
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. I agree with the point of view that
the
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printed paper would disappear in the future. Over two decades ago, one of the most popular media was
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a newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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, and almost every family would reserve printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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to
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on a daily basis.
This
 means that
newspaper
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newspapers
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 became the most influential mass media in that generation.
Therefore
, residents who lived in
the
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 period of time made a habit of reading
printed
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the printed
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 paper. There is no argument that a part of
the
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some
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people
favors
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 the touch of paper, which
feel
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feels
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 more comfortable for reading
book
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a book
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 and more friendly for one’s eyes.
By contrast
, there are many advantages
outweigh
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drawbacks
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on
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 watching updated
news
 online, resulting in modern
people
are
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 more likely to choose
this
 method for realizing information. Reading for free was the primary reason for attracting many readers to view online
news
 on the website. Many traditional
news
 corporations have dedicated
to
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themselves to
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 developing
new
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form
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 of information, they offered free watch
service
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services
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 on their website for attracting
people
spend
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 more time on
it
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them
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. Setting
advertisement
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advertisements
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 for making revenue was the latest business strategy.
In addition
, it is very handy for
people
 to check the updated
news
 at any time, only took a
second
 for typing the
key word
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keyword
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 and found the information they need online. In conclusion, I believe that printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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 will not exist anymore in the future due to the improvement of technology and the habits changing in
different
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generation
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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