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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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This
 line graph illustrates the
number
 of tourists who visited Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 to 2017. Overall, we can notice that there were more and more people
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 to the
island
 over a 7-year period, from one million to 3.5 million. It is clear that the
number
 of tourists who went to
Carribbean
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Caribbean
island
 in 2010
were
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 under one million, whereas the
number
 in 2017 was over three times higher than
2010
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. Visitors who arrived
the
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island
 by staying on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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increase
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 steadily, which was generally higher than the
tourists
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number of tourists
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 who stayed on
island
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. While there was
an
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 cross during a period from 2015 to 2016, the population who stayed on
island
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the island
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 overtook another one. After that, visitors on land grow stably year by year.
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, there was
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 slight decline after 2015 in the
number
 of people who chose to stay on cruised ships.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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