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Machines are taking over more and more jobs previously done by humans. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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Nowadays most of the work has been done by instruments whereas ,in the past, it has been done by
individuals
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. There are some benefits and drawbacks which will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are two main benefits to
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 the job
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machinery
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.
Firstly
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, it helps to enhance the production by using instruments. To elaborate
it
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, owners prefer to
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machinery
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 to increase manufacturing capacity which leads to
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 the making cost down.
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, people can get better revenue by selling them at
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price
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.
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, people who
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 machine tools to get consistency
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 product quality. To explain it, product quality plays a major role in the competitive market
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individuals
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 intend to utilize the
machinery
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 to get the perfect
products
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 and stand with their competitors.
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, there are multiple drawbacks to using machines to finish the job. In the
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 place, it could lead to unemployment in
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society.
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, if most of the jobs are accomplished by
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, human intervention would not require in the workplace. As a consequence, workers may face difficulty to get a job.
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,
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products
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 have less durability. To explain it,
products
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 which
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 made by instruments are delicate
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 consumers could not
use
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 those
products
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 for a longer period.
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,
individuals
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 have to spend money on a periodical basis which causes financial instability. In conclusion, if
individuals
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 prefer to
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machinery
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, they could get better work efficiency and stabilize the quality.
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, it could rise unemployment in civilization and affect
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’ durability.
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, it is necessary to weigh the benefits against the drawbacks carefully to prevent employment in society as well as work productivity.
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