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Some people believe that children should spend all of their time with their family. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

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Something that can be discussed for ages is the necessity for the parents and family to be present full
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 throughout childhood. It is a fact that children need to be close to their families.
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, is there something
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 as too close?
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, if a kid spends all the
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 with the parents, can
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 affect
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 person's sociability in the future? Nowadays, family values are discussed all the
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. Including children being one hundred per cent with a presence of a parent. Keeping kids inside a house full
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 can not be completely good, but, what is? Probably children raised
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 way have more difficulty being sociable.
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, people can argue that
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family issues should be equal to zero. Young people have different needs than adults. It is interesting to think that adults are always discussing what are the needs of a child,
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 society, as it is, requires preparation to understand and to live in itself. The main purpose of school is to do
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. Prepare kids for life and teach them how to use their minds. The importance is to
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 family values and presence is undeniable
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 it, nothing can be more important than the school experience.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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