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Many people work longer hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities .Does thid situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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The state of the present economy has left individuals with no option but to
work
 for longer periods so that they get enough funds to afford the things they need.
This
 has left no time for other activities
such
 as visiting family and friends, reading
one
's favourite book etc. There are both merits and demerits to
this
 situation. In
this
,
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 I will talk about both. An advantage of working longer
hours
 is that you earn extra income. In most companies and organizations, the more
hours
one
 works, the more salary
one
 receives.
For example
, nurses are obliged to
work
 six
hours
 per shift. If there's a shortage of staff and a nurse agrees to do extra
hours
, the hospital administration pays for the extra
hours
 spent at the workplace.
This
 money could go a long way in solving certain financial problems.
However
, working for long
hours
 with no rest is detrimental to a person's health. All
work
 and no play make Jack a dull boy. It is essential to take breaks in between
work
 for relaxation and to let your hair down. When people
work
 without rest, the body loses energy and without energy, a person becomes weak and falls sick.
Additionally
, spending too much time on
work
 and neglecting family and other social activities can affect
one
's mental health. Reading, cooking and talking to friends
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 very therapeutic. In conclusion, working for longer periods earns
one
 extra income to cater for certain financial problems.
Nonetheless
,
then
 it is important to have time outside
work
 for other relaxing activities.
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