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Recently published figures show that wild life population around the world has decreased by around 50% over the fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wild life round the world?

It is a universally accepted fact that wild
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animals
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 inhabitants have
threatened
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 and reduced over the past years.
This
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reduction
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a reduction
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 in
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wildlife
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wild life
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wildlife
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animals
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 including a logical solution
on
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 animal conservation. A number of factors may account for decreasing wild
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animals
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 growth rate, but one main cause is the process of human civilizations. To
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accommodate
accomodate
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accommodate
 and feed our world's population, we exploit and destroy every
last
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 square meter
on
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 land which is mostly used by other
species
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 on earth.
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,
destruction
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the destruction
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 of
rain forests
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rainforests
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 in African countries
have
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 made imbalance
effects
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 on
earth’s
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the earth’s
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 climate as
animals
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 absorb oxygen and produce carbon dioxide to stabilize
the
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 natural habitats. Another reason is keeping these
animals
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 in confined small places to protect them against
the
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food availability bad weather and
predors
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predators
 is a prime cause
in
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 the growth rate reduction.
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Although
Althoug
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, keeping these
animals
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 in the zoo is safe and costly as it demands
lot
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 of investment, they would not be able to breathe and get fresh air when we isolate them from their natural habitats, resulting
the
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 extinction of a
species
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. To solve
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 problem we must put endless efforts to conserve
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animals
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the animals
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 population on
earth
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 planet. It is hard to imagine our world without
animals
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.
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, we should spend huge investments to keep these creatures in their natural habitats. We should
also
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 avoid using harmful chemicals in the
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environment
envirnoment
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environment
 which may turn hazardous to other
species
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 on earth. Governments should charge penalty against those who
gets
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involve
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extinction
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the extinction
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 of endangered
species
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. To conclude, while, the biological diversity of
animals
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have
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bee
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 affected due to human activities to
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accommodate
accomodate
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accommodate
wild's
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 population, we must spend some resources to preserve
animals
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 and create harmony on our planet

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