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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of joise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to the people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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There is no iota of doubt about the fact that
noise
 pollution needs to be controlled and the government and our judicial system should make stick laws to control it.
this
 essay will shed the light on the pros and cons of making stick laws against
noise
. To embark , evidence is plenty to prove why
noise
 control provides a lot of benefits. The mammoth conspicuous benefit is
noise
 pollution. A
lot
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people
 suffering from
noise
 pollution nowadays.
People
 do parties in their houses in the middle of the night which disturbs the sleep of nearby residential neighbours.
Furthermore
, sometimes students who like to study in the nighttime to concentrate properly have to suffer as well. if there will be a law to control
this activities
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this activity
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 it is going to put a good impact on our society. Yet, there is another side to
this
 picture. if the government will make
this
 kind of law it will affect our privacy rights.
people
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 privacy rights will suffer because they have to play the music according to them. I have faced an experience on both sides.
Last
 year, my uncle was having a
party
 who is leaving
next
 door. I was studying in my room and I was facing an issue with concentration due to the high volume of songs. Even though
,
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 I was invited to the celebration and the
party
 belonged to the uncle's success I wanted to shut off the music. later, when my father came home we joined the
party
 and I wanted to enjoy the
party
 the whole night . In conclusion, in my ,opinion sticky rules to be made but the government should not disappoint the
party
people
 as well.
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