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many processed foods and ready-made meals contain preservatives and chemicals. What are the advantages to it. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? #foods

#foods #meals #preservatives #chemicals
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In recent times, fast
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 has become a predominant meal in human life. It is undeniable that these
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of the advantage and disadvantage On the one hand, ready-made
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 is a crucial role in community life, there are many benefits which contribute to us.
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, with a busy schedule,
people
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 would try to purchase these types of meals
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people
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 could buy these
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 in grocery stores and supermarkets. It would help to save their valuable time because it takes only a few minutes to cook.
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, 30% of
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food
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 consumption has been increased in Canada
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, another benefit is that it could available
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long period of time because it would aid certainly enhance their
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, the main disadvantage of
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 phenomenon is that it can negatively affect physical health, Consuming excessive
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foods
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 leads to many health-related diseases including infertility and hormone imbalances because processed
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 are genetically modified and contained different types of harmful ingredients including artificial colours, preservation and chemicals.
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, research shows, that 30% of
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 have been diagnosed 
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 diseases in the world
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, it kills important vitamins and nutrition while processing processed
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, most countries have implemented organic
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food
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 concepts because of the highest number of 
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 consume harmful
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foods
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.
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 better. If not,
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people
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 would spend money on diseases. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, consuming
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foods
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 has a vital part of its society. It can enforce the right method before using it.
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