Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

In the modern era, the impact technology has on scion are unacceptable. Even due to advance technology gadgets
such
as mobile phones, video games etc are available and easily purchased by anyone
moreover
, their parents provide them all these gadgets to use in their leisure
time
but scion uses them all the
time
even during their study
time
. On some, a statement many communities believe that it is positive development due to the children learning many things on the online platform as they watch videos of poems and stories on youtube. Even some see the study videos so it is a very beneficial way for them to learn easily and conveniently because not all children like to go to school. It can be boarded for them. By using mobile phones even they can save their precious
time
hence
communication on social media is very easy going they do not have to be formal and other things.
On the other hand
, even it made negative development in children's lives because they have become introverted people, so they lack face-to-face communication and they do not know how to express their gratitude towards elder people.
Furthermore
, it can make a major impact on the human body like weak eyesight so they have to wear glasses according to the digit of their eyesight. Even they can lose interest in studies. Spending hours on smartphones can even damage their night-
time
routine. One of the mobile developers said 'At
first
they made cell phones for work purposes only not how people are using them nowadays. In conclusion, we can say that
this
major issue is mostly complained about by offspring's parents even though they have provided them with smartphones
hence
they can make
time
on using smartphones but they did not do that.
However
, every child is different so it depends on them how they use it.
Submitted by urvik01patel on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
What to do next:
Look at other essays: