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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for family and leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give the reason for your answer and include any relevant examples of your knowledge and experience.

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Time
 plays a very crucial role in everybody's
life
.
Time
 is a very precious thing to everyone. Many pupils are working longer and longer
hours
 and spending less
time
 with their families. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both scenarios and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 matter along with some relevant examples. On the one side, some communities
work
 for longer
hours
 due to their working profession. For pupils who
work
in particular
 ,fields it is compulsory to
work
 more than their working
hours
.
For example
, a
person
 who works in the forensic department has to
work
 more
hours
 during the investigation process. They have to travel to the crime scene and collect the evidence. They should be available to the department at any
time
 during the investigation process. And another good example
,
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is a
person
 who is working as a software employee and
also
 has an interest in the acting field. So
this
person
 tries to spend more
hours
 balancing
work
life
 and passionate
life
. In
this
 ,way people can fulfil their goals and
work
. On the other side, some communities
work
 for more
hours
 in the field in which they are not interested. These people will not have self-satisfaction in their
work
 and
also
 cannot spend their
time
 with their families.
This
 will lead to some health problems like stress, headache, etc. Spending
time
 with their children is
also
 a very important thing to a parent.
For example
, A
person
 who is working in a software company spends more
time
 on his/her
work
 due to less experience and he/she cannot spend
time
 with their family due hectic schedule and feeling stress in their
life
. To sum up, In my ,view the advantages and disadvantages of working longer
hours
depend
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 on an individual and how he handles the situation. Working for longer
hours
 has both advantages and disadvantages.
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